Dylon Koran
January 26th, 2011
Story one
Fatal at the Wheel
Today at 6:45 a.m. a chain reaction accident happened on Interstate 790 due to the collision of two trailers being pulled by tractors killing two, and hospitalizing 20 more.
Two drivers of cars were dead and another twenty victims had to be hospitalized, four of them with life threatening injuries. Two of the seriously injured were air lifted to the trauma center in Statesville
The cause of the accident was narrowed down by a preliminary source, Two Tractor trailers collided when driving down Interstate 790. One of the trailers was carrying diesel fuel, “ It was very lucky, Wei Said, that it didn’t roll over or dump any fuel or catch fire.”
According to Sgt. Albert Wei of the Police department the vehicles of the accident included four tractor trailers and fourteen cars. When Tony Sullivan of the fire department arrived he said it was quite hard to tell which victims belonged to what vehicles, “I have never seen anything that bad in the 18 ½ years I have been with the fire department.
“The road looked like a war zone,” stated Sullivan. There were victims sitting next to cars, blood in the street, emergency workers running around trying to help injured people. All of the fire departments ambulances were at the scene including help from four neighboring cities.
Although the accident happened going northbound, it shutdown both north and south lanes. This closure made commuters have to drive to the eastern side of the city and commute on interstate 690 backing traffic past three hours.
Interstate 790 was still under investigation and shutdown at 10 a.m. today and is unsure of its reopening.
Thorough information about the article, lots of explaining and detail. I saw some errors in writing but other than that, I thought it looked pretty good!
ReplyDeleteThis looks pretty good, but "trailers pulled by tractors" is pretty confusing.
ReplyDeleteNot bad at all. I would say though that in your lead maybe put a little more info. That and the book said that the police were investigating it, but they thought it could have possibly been cause by the two trucks, but they weren't sure yet.
ReplyDeleteRemember not to begin your lead with a time or attribution. Begin with the news. See page 156 and 160 step nine.
ReplyDeleteAlso, once you have said Interstate 790, through out the rest of the story you are supposed to refer to it as I-790. See page 641 3.13.
There are probably some mistakes in my story also. I'm still trying to get used to all these new rules too. :)
I enjoyed reading this. I like the way you put it all together with out it being scattered.
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