Dylon Koran
Jour. 2121 Tesha
Gant’s Goodnight Sleep
People understand when I say they want the big, sophisticated, macho standpoint from others prospective. People go as far as this in sleep. They say that they do not need more than seven hours, that’s what they’ve been told.
An interview with Phycology Professor Diana Gant gave the answers to a sleep shortage followed by many of people. Seventeen years in the department of psychology, Gant says, “Most people need nine to ten hours a night to perform optimally. Some should be taken in afternoon naps.” Most people get around seven hours of sleep a night as an average. It’s quite easy to tell if you are not getting enough sleep. You feel drowsy tired, cranky, and become unwanted to be around. You also become a public and personal safety hazard.
Would you believe that Russia’s Chernobyl nuclear reactor accident or the oil dump at Valdez was traced down to tiredness? Being tired over a long term is almost as effective as going to work drunk. Gant did a correlation study on the number of accidents the day after daylight savings time in the spring. It showed an 8% increase in accidents.
A difference of two hours of sleep can change your day from happy to sad. Under sleeping one would feel as if their clothes felt heavier to being tired after lunch. The easy solution to this according to Gant is to Have a nice cool room about sixty five degrees after relaxing for about an hour beforehand. Do not eat or drink anything with sugar or caffeine, and stay away from tobacco and alcohol. All may have a person waking up at 2:00 or 3:00 a.m. Top it off with a comfortable bed, and have a perfect night’s sleep
The lead was confusing and there are a few run on sentances that could have used commas, example : The easy solution to this, according to Gant, is to have a cool room.......
ReplyDeleteOther than that it was pretty good.
The ending, I thought, was your main strong point. The way you worded it would make for an amazing end to a story. But the lead wasn't very capturing. And the body of the story wasn't exactly in order, is how I felt. Otherwise Good job!
ReplyDeleteI agree that your lead is a little confusing. I think you have a good idea in your head, but it is not translating well on paper. I like your second to last paragraph; and the irony in it. Good use of quotes too. Maybe add a few more?
ReplyDeleteI also thought it was a little confusing, but i love the detail you put into it.
ReplyDeleteYeah dude your wording is pretty confusing. Never fear though, it's an easy fix. Just listen to those people up there. A grammatical error: under sleeping should be under-sleeping. Just look for grammatical errors and stuff, otherwise you will be eaten alive as far as grading. Thats what gets me.
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