Story 4
Dylon Koran
Story 4
Jour. 2121 Christensen
Bethany's Musical Life
Physical activity that is governed by a set of rules or customs and often engaged in competitively is the definition of sport. Baseball, football, softball, hockey, and volleyball are sports. The very first thing Bethany Lichtscheidl said to me when describing herself was that she was not a sports person. That she played the guitar, and sometimes entered competitions. To anyone knowing the definition of sport, they would agree to say that playing an instrument is a sport.
Bethany attempted to play volleyball and softball, and like some players that are good at the game, she did not have the feelings for them. Watching her brother being super big into music made Bethany pick up a habit that consisted of eight years of playing guitar and twelve years of signing.
Bethany Started a career of events ranging from high school talent shows to the lookouts of St. Croix by her 1st and her favorite event in middle school. She was so nervous that she forgot the words when she walked on to the stage. “ I walked on to the stage, closed my eyes, and just sang my best,” Said Bethany, “ by the second verse I was so comfortable on that stage I didn't want to be done. This was only the start of many great accomplishments for Bethany.
Being Bethany's inspiration to music, her big brother and her now write, and record together. They even have their own CD During the summer of 2011 Bethany and her brother are trying out for spots on the hit show “American Idol”. She says neither of them care if they make it or not it's just for fun. She also stated her dream, “ I know it's a silly dream that just about half of America has, but I would love to be a professional signer, not for the fame or the money, but because it's what I really love to do.” So after a few high school contest excellent and two superior awards, Bethany has been in a band named Neon Bay for the past three summers where she has written all of their music. There is no doubt in her mind that she will continue with music, and rock on with the sport.
Hi! Dylon. It is too small size. I try to read, but it is hard to understand it.
ReplyDeleteI liked your lead and the way you wrapped up the story. Nice work. There are a few words that probably shouldn't be in capital letters (like the word Started in the third paragrpah) but I liked your story!
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ReplyDeleteI totally had to remove the above post because it included some typos that made it sound soooo awkward. The funny part is that the post was about the awkward phrasing in your story! Anyway ... here's a second try ...
ReplyDeleteInteresting lead and closing. I liked the way you tied the story together with them. I found that the wording is sometimes awkward and I think if you read the story aloud it may help you to recognize where you could improve upon your phrasing.
I think I said this last time but your punctuation and stuff needs some work. I always get scalped on that.
ReplyDeleteI really like the way the lead is explained through out the writing. I also had to copy and paste to read the small font.
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